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Title: Fix (Power Corrupts Remix)
Author: [livejournal.com profile] aliaspiral
Fandom: Buffy the Vampire Slayer
Summary: Dawn held the universe in the palm of her hand, and she was going to shape it to her liking.
Rating: R
Warnings: major character deaths
Spoilers: The Gift
Disclaimer: All hail Joss, who owns everything mentioned.
Title, Author and URL of original story: Absolute Power – Krissy ([livejournal.com profile] _shewalks)





The first thing she did was stop.

STOP IT. Stop everything. Make it stop.

Stop the falling, stop the bleeding (everywhere, all over), stop the crying you big baby, just stop it you’re in charge now.

She couldn’t stop her sister though. Couldn’t stop her from running, from jumping, from leaving like she swore she wouldn’t do. Couldn’t stop her falling through the vortex or whatever it was, and the Summers was sucked right out of big sister before the ground and Dawn caught her.

It was ok, though. It wasn’t her fault. Buffy had never been good at heights.

And Dawn could fix it, this time.

Last time, things went wrong with Mom and zombies and Spike and those stupid eggs, but this time would be better. This time it will work.

She doesn’t even have to do the spell this time. She can just fix it.

As soon as she figures out how to get Spike’s shattered skull back together, and make Tara stop screaming. Willow is lying on her back with wide open eyes, and Xander kneels beside Anya, who can’t talk with that much blood in her mouth.

She can fix it. She can.

She’s the Key. And Glory (No, Ben. Ben, who is dead because Giles killed him when Buffy couldn’t.) showed her how to open the lock.

Just turn the key, and open the door, and fix everything.

It was easy. It will be easy.

She messed up last time. That was all. She was still learning. This time will be different.

Everyone would live, except for Ben, because he has to die for Glory to die. Or maybe Glory could die and leave Ben alone in his own body, without a red dress as a warning.

Giggling isn’t good at a time like this, even though Ben looks amazing in three inch heels.

But Glory shrieks in anger and throws Ben under the crane herself, crippling him, but not her, which shouldn’t work but does somehow.

Buffy dies on the steps trying to get to the top.

Try again. And stop screaming, damn it. She already fell and you can’t catch her.

Don’t look down.

Don’t look down this time. Maybe if Spike dies before he makes it to the top of the tower..

No, no, she tried that one.

Doc had laughed and sliced her cheeks open, leaving blood running down her face, and a knife in the belly hurt so much worse than she had ever considered, and Buffy was running towards her and his eyes had shifted to the side and she screamed.

That had hurt, and Buffy had still fallen, and her mother was standing at the base of the tower with a vacant look on her face and Tara had died.

No, no, not Tara. Xander, that time. Xander, with one arm ripped from his body like a butterfly wing, except for the blood and the quiet choked gasp that came with it as Glory reached for one leg.

Try again. Stop crying and fix it.

Maybe if Willow could see what would happen, she could stop it.

But Willow just stopped, looking upward and raised one hand in farewell to Dawn.

No, no, she wasn’t saying goodbye, she was trying to aim through determined eyes, and god, she had thought that Willow was her friend.

Willow died and Tara spun laughing into the street and Xander and Anya froze. Spike looked up, and she could see that he knew, he knew what she had done, what she was doing, but Buffy was already running for the steps of the tower, and where Buffy goes, Spike followed.

Will follow.

She tried not to giggle again, because it hadn’t mattered, didn’t matter that time either anyway, because Spike tried to stop Buffy, tries to tell her what little sister was doing, had done, and she had to turn the key again as Buffy pushed him away and off and down in rejection, and it wouldn’t work without Spike.

She had tried that already. She thinks. She thought.

Something about Spike was necessary, although she didn’t know why. It wouldn’t work without Buffy either, but she knew that. That’s why she had to fix it.

She was dizzy this time, and she tried to slow her steps as they dragged her to the top. Maybe if she could just slow it down. Slow everything down. Just to give herself time to think.

Stop crying!

Buffy falls in slow motion and Giles falls after her, hands out and pleading; No, no. Please, no!

Buffy was dead before she hit the ground, but Giles wasn’t, but it didn’t matter, because he fell, he jumped, headfirst after his slayer, and that was ok, because he didn’t have a place without Buffy, but who would write in his journals now?

Glory lives and Ben dies, and Anya is gone somewhere and Xander is choking from where he is being crushed by a pile of rubble.

And Tara laughs with the other crazy people, and Willow’s eyes have gone black.

No.

Start over.

Do it again.

It doesn’t matter that your voice is gone from screaming, that you think you’re still bleeding and bleeding or that Buffy pushed you this time, instead of jumping herself, because you can still fix it!

It doesn’t matter that it goes wrong and has gone wrong and is going wrong right now, because it doesn’t matter. You’re the Key, damn it!

And your mother is looking at you with pity in her eyes, or what might be pity if there was anything behind the blank faced nothing that shuffled towards her, muttering about pumpkin bellies and making shhh shhh sounds through a gaping mouth.

Buffy is crying when she kills their mother, and she doesn’t, didn’t untie her baby sister before turning around and closing her eyes and falling backwards like Dawn would fall onto her bed after doing her homework.

Stop crying.

You can fix this.

Stop CRYING.

END

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Date: 2007-04-22 03:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] liz-marcs.livejournal.com
Wow. This is positively fantastic, even without reading the original. It's both chilling and creepy as Dawn keeps trying to fix it over and over again.

Truly perfection in how it captures Dawn right at that moment on the tower as she keeps trying to work out how to fix everything. And the fact her mother is still there...brrrrrr.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! I had a great time writing it. I also fixed the link to the original drabble.

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Date: 2007-04-22 04:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bastardsnow.livejournal.com
This is brilliant. I absolutely love it.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
thank you!

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Date: 2007-04-22 04:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] 47-trek-47.livejournal.com
Wow, that was awesome. I know, that's the lamest feedback ever, I'm sorry. But it really was awesome.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
hey, no feedback is ever lame, all feedback is GOLD. and im so glad you liked it!

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Date: 2007-04-22 05:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kindkit.livejournal.com
This is amazing. Just beautifully done, and I found myself feeling so sorry for Dawn even as the horror mounted up. Plus, you handle the complexity of time in this story (the way Dawn keeps remaking history) brilliantly.

(By the way, your link to the original story isn't working. And I've love a chance to read the original, too!)

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Date: 2007-04-22 05:51 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
There's an extra " at the end of the link. Ill fix it when I can, but until then, you can just cut and paste, delete the ", and hit enter to go to the original.

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Date: 2007-04-22 05:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] a2zmom.livejournal.com
Wow, completely fantastic. I love Dawn's complete hubris here, convinced that she can reorder the universe to her liking.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
we all wish we could reorder the universe. Dawn just had a way to try it.

thanks!

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Date: 2007-04-22 07:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] booster17.livejournal.com
Oh, that's just so scary, in both concept and execution. Marvelous stuff.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
thank you. it got away from me while i was writing it, and it ended up creepier than intended.

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Date: 2007-04-22 07:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mistressrenet.livejournal.com
Oh, that's amazing-- so dark and so plausible.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
I love "What if"s and this was a great excuse to play around with one big one.

thanks for reading!

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From: [identity profile] mistressrenet.livejournal.com - Date: 2007-04-30 12:11 am (UTC) - Expand

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Date: 2007-04-22 08:11 pm (UTC)
kangeiko: (extraordinary)
From: [personal profile] kangeiko
Here via a rec from [livejournal.com profile] selenak - and well, deserved it is, too. WOW. This is amazing.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
thank you! and i have to go thank [livejournal.com profile] selenak for the rec!

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Date: 2007-04-22 10:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] counteragent.livejournal.com
Whoa. I'm amazed that the unusual voice didn't disturb the flow of the story, but rather enhanced its traumatic creepiness. Nice job.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
oh, thank you. I was concerned about the mix of second and third person voice, so i am very glad it worked!

thanks!

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Date: 2007-04-23 12:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] likeadeuce.livejournal.com
Oh, this is amazing --

poor Dawn.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
wow, thank you!

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Date: 2007-04-23 01:55 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] soundingsea.livejournal.com
Ooh. *shivers* Creepy but cool.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
i was completely going for creepy, but im very glad that cool came through as well.

thank you!

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Date: 2007-04-23 02:38 am (UTC)
zulu: Karen Gillam from Dr. Who, wearing a saucy top hat (buffy - hallelujah)
From: [personal profile] zulu
Wonderful, wonderful stuff. I love the creepiness, the giggling, the mantra of "stop crying and fix it". Yes. Excellent job, mystery writer!

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
thank you so much! im glad the repetitions worked.

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Date: 2007-04-23 03:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thistlerose.livejournal.com
This is amazing. Chilling. Wow.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
Thank you so much!

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Date: 2007-04-23 08:22 pm (UTC)
ext_17679: (Default)
From: [identity profile] netgirl-y2k.livejournal.com
Creepy and fantastic.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
thank you!

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Date: 2007-04-24 02:24 am (UTC)
tigriswolf: (JA walking)
From: [personal profile] tigriswolf
Oh, _wow_.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
Thanks! Im glad you liked it!

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Date: 2007-04-27 05:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] spiralleds.livejournal.com
There's something about stories where someone is trying to pull the strings of time and fix it all that always pulls me in. Nicely done in the way Dawn is slowly losing her mind (and soul) as she keeps messing with the time lines.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
i love it when people try to fix things and fail miserably, so I loved the chance to play around with this particular scene. thanks!

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Date: 2007-04-28 03:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] firstgold.livejournal.com
This was absolutely fantastic. Wow. I have to admit, I was really curious as to what fic of mine you would choose to remix, and to be honest, I didn't think it would have been that drabble. I love what you've done with it and how you've made it your own. Dawn's POV is chilling and just ... wow.

Thank you so much.

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Date: 2007-04-29 10:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
I had a very hard time choosing what to remix, as there were several lines in different fics that really grabbed me. but this one idea, of Dawn using the Key part of herself to change things really intrigued me. i had a great time writing it, and im so glad you like it!

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Date: 2007-04-28 04:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mymatedave.livejournal.com
that was amazing and terrifying. Desparation makes monsters of us all is a phrase that would most definately suit Dawn here.

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Date: 2007-04-29 11:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
Oh, I like that, about desparation and monsters. Im so glad Dawn's panic came through. thanks for reading!

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Date: 2007-04-28 07:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] roguewords.livejournal.com
Oh this is creepy, and so interesting.

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Date: 2007-04-29 11:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
thanks! i love playing around with different ideas.

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Date: 2007-04-28 11:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wordsofastory.livejournal.com
Wow. This is really an amazing story; it sent shivers down my back. Excellent job.

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Date: 2007-04-29 11:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
ooh, what a compliment! thanks!

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Date: 2007-04-29 04:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tartanshell.livejournal.com
Oh, I liked this a lot! Creepy and awesome. :)

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Date: 2007-04-29 11:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
thank you! creepy is always fun for me to do!

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Date: 2007-04-29 01:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fox1013.livejournal.com
This is awesome. For serious.

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Date: 2007-04-29 11:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
wow! thanks!

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Date: 2007-04-29 11:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sunnyd-lite.livejournal.com
This story has been rec'd various places.

It deserves to be! Dawn's panic, resolution, and wacky time loops to never find the right factors is chilling and enthralling.

WOW

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Date: 2007-04-30 12:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
im AMAZED at the reception this story has gotten. thank you!

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Date: 2007-04-29 11:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cadence-k.livejournal.com
This is so well done! It's especially creepy because I can really imagine Dawn thinking and acting this way. Great job!

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Date: 2007-04-30 02:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
oh thank you! what a great compliment! so glad you enjoyed it!

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Date: 2007-04-30 03:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] flyingcarpet.livejournal.com
Wow. Just... This is so intricate and fascinating and just... poor Dawn. Great job.

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Date: 2007-05-18 05:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aliaspiral.livejournal.com
wow! thanks!

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