So, I totally failed at giving you better feedback before the reveal, but mainly because writing this good always makes my brain go in a loop and words seem to fail me. And I was procrastinating because I knew this would turn into an essay. (You're about to see why often I lurk on your journal instead of leaving you comments; the level of my fangirling over writers I like can get really scary. *g*)
On the overall, this is just an amazing piece of fiction. The pacing and the structure of narration works perfectly for the progression of the story, and the writing style just really gave the whole thing such a strong sense of Lois. The dialogue and character interactions really couldn't have been better, and the character history!--oh, the history.
On a more personal note, this OWNS because, well... let's just say, after the third time seeing the film, I walked out not feeling too hot on Lois. It's the main reason I don't read anything but gen and slash in this fandom. But not only do you have me completely understanding how Lois feels here and why she does what she does... you make me like her. Possibly even love her. I didn't really think that was possible and I'm in all sorts of awe of you right now.
On a fangirl level, this is fucking fantastic. It takes the situation that was left dangling at the end of the movie and resolves it so wonderfully that, until the sequel comes out, this is going to be my canon.
On a remix level, well... I'll get into that below.
And now to quote 239872398273 passages:
...leaving not-Clark babbling at a possibly-too-amused-by-the-whole-situation Richard, was that she hadn't taken the time to aim the thing properly. If she had hit him, the stapler would have shattered on his impenetrable Kryptonian skull... Okay, so a) all these things I'm quoting are just damn fine writing (and many of them are hilarious), but there's this extra added layer of joy because I remember all these little details, and I love the way you've worked them; expanded, tweaked, fleshed out. There were five parts that stood out in particular; this was the first one. I think what I love about this is how in the span of two sentences you characterize all three characters and their dynamic to perfection.
Lying about what planet you were from on a job application was probably a federal crime or something. Hahahaha. This is such a great Lois line. She just shines throughout the whole thing; her digs all walk that thin line between exasperated love and bitterness/annoyance beautifully.
...but once he said it, it was just like Lois had known all along, and being an ace reporter she should have known, and that was almost the same as knowing). Remixee's joy moment #2!
...taking Clark (in the daytime, in the city, on the ground, he was still Clark; she was almost used to this idea by now) to Richard's favorite Greek restaurant, on the philosophy he had acquired in journalism school, that injecting ouzo into any situation automatically improved it. Oh, what an interesting way of putting when he's Clark and when he's not. Love this bit of negotiating his new personality (and how she isn't sure what to call him). And ouzo injection was remixee's joy moment #3 :)
But often, Lois would catch him speaking in the first-person plural, and with her reporter's instinct for precision, she would ask, "Who's 'we'?" Fabulous detail. Subtle, real, and also says a lot about how what she has with Richard is not a throwaway relationship.
Comments - A
On the overall, this is just an amazing piece of fiction. The pacing and the structure of narration works perfectly for the progression of the story, and the writing style just really gave the whole thing such a strong sense of Lois. The dialogue and character interactions really couldn't have been better, and the character history!--oh, the history.
On a more personal note, this OWNS because, well... let's just say, after the third time seeing the film, I walked out not feeling too hot on Lois. It's the main reason I don't read anything but gen and slash in this fandom. But not only do you have me completely understanding how Lois feels here and why she does what she does... you make me like her. Possibly even love her. I didn't really think that was possible and I'm in all sorts of awe of you right now.
On a fangirl level, this is fucking fantastic. It takes the situation that was left dangling at the end of the movie and resolves it so wonderfully that, until the sequel comes out, this is going to be my canon.
On a remix level, well... I'll get into that below.
And now to quote 239872398273 passages:
...leaving not-Clark babbling at a possibly-too-amused-by-the-whole-situation Richard, was that she hadn't taken the time to aim the thing properly. If she had hit him, the stapler would have shattered on his impenetrable Kryptonian skull...
Okay, so a) all these things I'm quoting are just damn fine writing (and many of them are hilarious), but there's this extra added layer of joy because I remember all these little details, and I love the way you've worked them; expanded, tweaked, fleshed out. There were five parts that stood out in particular; this was the first one. I think what I love about this is how in the span of two sentences you characterize all three characters and their dynamic to perfection.
Lying about what planet you were from on a job application was probably a federal crime or something.
Hahahaha. This is such a great Lois line. She just shines throughout the whole thing; her digs all walk that thin line between exasperated love and bitterness/annoyance beautifully.
...but once he said it, it was just like Lois had known all along, and being an ace reporter she should have known, and that was almost the same as knowing).
Remixee's joy moment #2!
...taking Clark (in the daytime, in the city, on the ground, he was still Clark; she was almost used to this idea by now) to Richard's favorite Greek restaurant, on the philosophy he had acquired in journalism school, that injecting ouzo into any situation automatically improved it.
Oh, what an interesting way of putting when he's Clark and when he's not. Love this bit of negotiating his new personality (and how she isn't sure what to call him). And ouzo injection was remixee's joy moment #3 :)
But often, Lois would catch him speaking in the first-person plural, and with her reporter's instinct for precision, she would ask, "Who's 'we'?"
Fabulous detail. Subtle, real, and also says a lot about how what she has with Richard is not a throwaway relationship.