I love that you opened with another stanza of the Graves poem-- it just works beautifully.
The original, while not always in Remus' POV, was incredibly sympathetic to Remus, and your remix shifts our sympathies to Sirius, which makes it a wonderful companion piece. I also enjoy all the glimpses of their future, which is not always a particularly happy one-- which is why I have always found this pairing to be so compelling. I particularly like that each scene steps seemlessly outof the one that preceeds it, at the same time either thrusting us into the future or pulling us back to the past. The ending is stunning-- it brings them full circle, and reminds us that the trust between them has always been a tenuous and difficult thing.
A lovely job all around-- I'm positively thrilled by it! Thank you!
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I love that you opened with another stanza of the Graves poem-- it just works beautifully.
The original, while not always in Remus' POV, was incredibly sympathetic to Remus, and your remix shifts our sympathies to Sirius, which makes it a wonderful companion piece. I also enjoy all the glimpses of their future, which is not always a particularly happy one-- which is why I have always found this pairing to be so compelling. I particularly like that each scene steps seemlessly outof the one that preceeds it, at the same time either thrusting us into the future or pulling us back to the past. The ending is stunning-- it brings them full circle, and reminds us that the trust between them has always been a tenuous and difficult thing.
A lovely job all around-- I'm positively thrilled by it! Thank you!