The thing about this that impresses me the most (and there are many wonderful things about it) are the vivid, spot-on characterizations of the POV characters.
Winky is exactly what a house elf should sound like - with different priorities from humans, but not of inferior intelligence. I could absolutely, 100% see how she became the Winky we see in GOF and OotP.
Barty is just ... ooh, I want to slap him, especially how he treats Winky. Exactly the right kind of arrogant snot.
Lucius is also the right kind of arrogant for him - and then I like the look at how sane, pre-Azkaban Bella sees him.
Narcissa - I love the way that, right from the beginning, you've highlighted how her strength is more in interpersonal relations and connections than in vision or ideology.
Regulus is just a perfect sulky, slightly oblivious teenager - some of his thoughts on Voldemort had me giggling a bit! And Crouch Sr rounds it out nicely. Wonderful job!
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Winky is exactly what a house elf should sound like - with different priorities from humans, but not of inferior intelligence. I could absolutely, 100% see how she became the Winky we see in GOF and OotP.
Barty is just ... ooh, I want to slap him, especially how he treats Winky. Exactly the right kind of arrogant snot.
Lucius is also the right kind of arrogant for him - and then I like the look at how sane, pre-Azkaban Bella sees him.
Narcissa - I love the way that, right from the beginning, you've highlighted how her strength is more in interpersonal relations and connections than in vision or ideology.
Regulus is just a perfect sulky, slightly oblivious teenager - some of his thoughts on Voldemort had me giggling a bit! And Crouch Sr rounds it out nicely. Wonderful job!