Ooh, you made this really hot! I particularly like what you've done with part one -- the way the dialogue now serves as perfect punctuation for action -- and the complications you added to the John/Bobby/Rogue triangle in part three. That's really the pivot of the story, isn't it?

Your Pyro is tough and funny (the "implied rules" thing is great), but like kindkit said up there, you left just enough of his vulnurability visible.

Thanks for remixing for me!