Er....do you want editorial comments? 1. Did Tolkien ever use the word "elfling"? I've never heard it before. 2. If his hands were balled into fists already, he couldn't grab his hair to tear it out. 3. "Lieutenant." 4. I like the scene with the M's at the campfire...very touching. 5. "Valinor," not "the Valinor." 6. How in the living hell did Elrond sail alone across the Sea to Numenor??? I mean, sure, he's an elf, but his name isn't Thor Heyerdahl, either. Did he take ship with merchant Numenoreans, maybe? That would make sense. 7. I think horses have hair, not fur, even on their bodies. Or maybe a "coat." But "fur" sounds wrong. 8. What is Sorion?
I love the feel this story has! And I agree with the previous poster--the back-and-forth between their youth and their age is a nice touch.
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1. Did Tolkien ever use the word "elfling"? I've never heard it before.
2. If his hands were balled into fists already, he couldn't grab his hair to tear it out.
3. "Lieutenant."
4. I like the scene with the M's at the campfire...very touching.
5. "Valinor," not "the Valinor."
6. How in the living hell did Elrond sail alone across the Sea to Numenor??? I mean, sure, he's an elf, but his name isn't Thor Heyerdahl, either. Did he take ship with merchant Numenoreans, maybe? That would make sense.
7. I think horses have hair, not fur, even on their bodies. Or maybe a "coat." But "fur" sounds wrong.
8. What is Sorion?
I love the feel this story has! And I agree with the previous poster--the back-and-forth between their youth and their age is a nice touch.