This is great! I like the little details you put in like "He eased his grip enough so that she wouldn't have bruises on her skin, but not enough that she could pull free." And Henrietta calling Jayne and Inara her parents! And ""But that woman in there gave hers up so that you could have one, and if you throw it away, then that means she's dying for nothing at all.""

I liked the way you worked this theme into the story: "It ain't what you wanted," he finally said. "What you want don't much matter. It's what you get, that's all."


I really liked it.