You have done such a wonderful job with what you had to work with, a bare-bones skeleton of an idea that sort of makes me cringe when I think of it now. :D
I love the way you fleshed out Harvey, restored his presence as a never-ending torment and threat; and you obviously put a lot of thought into the politics of the circumstances and filled the backstory gaps. And the loose dog metaphor (even though, poor Braca, it reduces his station to a mere dogcatcher, hee), very clever.
But this - oh yes, this:
"Sleep," Braca says, and the sound of his voice drowns out Harvey's cursing and pleading, carries him through to somewhere blissfully silent. It's been so long he almost doesn't recognize the feeling when it comes. "Oh," he says, surprised, "it's peaceful."
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Date: 2007-04-22 06:31 pm (UTC)You have done such a wonderful job with what you had to work with, a bare-bones skeleton of an idea that sort of makes me cringe when I think of it now. :D
I love the way you fleshed out Harvey, restored his presence as a never-ending torment and threat; and you obviously put a lot of thought into the politics of the circumstances and filled the backstory gaps. And the loose dog metaphor (even though, poor Braca, it reduces his station to a mere dogcatcher, hee), very clever.
But this - oh yes, this:
"Sleep," Braca says, and the sound of his voice drowns out Harvey's cursing and pleading, carries him through to somewhere blissfully silent. It's been so long he almost doesn't recognize the feeling when it comes. "Oh," he says, surprised, "it's peaceful."
This is *marvelous.* Thank you so much!